Crit musings

One of the pieces for tomorrow felt flat. It's wrong, but I can't explain why, or what would make it feel less flat for me. Which is frustrating, because it's the second piece by this author which has felt flat. I don't know if it's just a first draft flaw, which are quite common around here (I have this tendency to use one really truly wrong word once in the story: "coolest" in a very formal medieval/regencies story, 'crash' (in the stay for the the night sense) in a far future planet colonization piece.)

Taxiing

There's a big daddy taxi service in town. "Who's your daddy." says the side of the cars.

Alt history of artificial places

Okay, so Geoff was talking to me about my story today, Blinding the Seasons. I have an ending that while ambigous, has the hope for a cure. He wants me to write the Cassandra's life, 50 years down the line with no cure. Which is not at all the story I was writing. but is fascinating. And I want to write it *too*. :-) not instead, in addition. And I don't know how I can write the same story twice with completely different endings. I mean, essentially my original story solves the problem. The other story would be an alt history of a made up world.