Oh, the hatred

I have now printed out my story, and it is taunting me with promises of how bad it will be. For example, yesterday I wrote part in third. Today while opening it up to print, I looked at that person's POV earlier in the story. Not third. This is why Drafts are allowed to suck. Because they will.

I am still glad I finished it--it's *long!* even bad as it is--but I have feelings that say I will be working very hard to make it not suck by thursday. Because, oh the suckage. I currently hate it. It is worst story ever. I would leave it in a basket at a church, but no one will ever love this story, so it may as well stay with me and grow up to be bitter and unloved like the rest of them. (Actually, my recent odds of selling a new story are quite good--the last two I finished, I sold. The problem is currently the finishing.)

The bottom of page three? that's where it switches from first to third, and makes me write the rest of his POV in third. That, at least, is easy enough to fix. I have gotten quite good at fixing POVs due to my total inability to stay in the same one the whole story (for some reason, I always *always* write story notes in the wrong POV.).

What I'm most worried about is the last 3 pages--namely, I suspect they're about 2K too early in the story. They may have other problems, but I think others will tell me that I"m missing the important part of the story. I'm also missing a point to this guy--he's one of the main characters. THe other one dies, but I don't know how he changes, and I think that's probably important too. (Also, I kinda hate the end the way I have it now, and I can't tell if it's because I don't like killing people off, or if it's because I killed her off but could have gotten a better ending some other way.

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I don't think I've mentioned lately that the complete and utter UNFAIRNESS about YA novels is that I read them too quickly. I just noticed something's similarity to a Gareth Nix line, and then became very very sad that I already read Sir Thursday and won't get Lady Friday until it's written. *pines*

Notes on Revision (An ongoing entry)

Official stupidest sentence thus far: "All I could think of...was the ghost story, the one with the dead girl." As if it makes it any better, this is the second sentence in the story. Nothing like starting as you mean to go on, right?

In the same sentence I explicitly had him open the door for her, even though later in the story the door only opens from the outside.

It's not as bad as I thought it would be, and some places are practically perfect. And for a change, it's very little itty bitty word tweaks, more rephrasing things, and actually revealling things in the story. I have a problem with giving the reader information that they need for the story. Usually, it turns out that my stories are closer to a giant game of keep away.

Bottom of page 8. "Transition." Not bad. First note that isn't corrected text. Of course, now I have to transit this paragraph, but that's bound to be possible. I'm sure. In theory.

And I'm up to page 19, the start of the last scene. Which is going to wait for a bit to revise, because I'm trying to decide if I need to add another 500 words or so to her last scene. Probably. Maybe another bit after getting out of the truck, with Patrick, to emphasize what she thinks will happen? That could be good. I've also got to decide what will happen with the death. I think it's right, but I'm not sure if the way she dies is the right way, or if it should be an accident with crowd control, which was my backup death.