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Two hours of work, and my story's about 75 words shorter.

Somehow this doesn't feel rewarding. On the plus side, 140K of reviews has been reduced to 51K (file size, not word count) of stuff that needs , and a lot of that is just repeats--'make the ending less easy' was a definite theme in the story. And I think it's not so much that the ending is easy, it's just a little too fortuitous the way everything clicks together, and the explaining that I have to do so that people understand what's going to happen at the end ends up making the end really obvious, and thus too simple. So I have to think about things like making the realization less Duck's and more Adrian's (and possibly about rename Duck, as he confuses everyone. I should call him Bebop instead, clearly. I've forgotten what Duck's boyfriend's name is, so I don't know if it's a possibility. Kirsten will have to tell me.) I have to make Adrian work a little harder at what he's doing, and I have to do it in under 400 words. :) Or I have to go chopping. we'll see.

And then, once that's all done, I have to read the damn thing and see if it still makes sense, or if I just randomly added things that make it even less comprehensible. Only, I'm tired of reading this story. I skim as it is.

Oh, and if it's going to JJA first, I'd better make sure the opening grabs. or put the naked pictures a few pages in.

(no subject)

This is just to say
I have buried your cat
Which you left with me for the weekend
And which you were expecting to pick up on Monday.

Forgive me.
She was dead.
So stiff
and starting to smell funky."

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This is not to say
that poetry is a waste of time.
This is just to say that
I have written the novel
that probably you will say
is a major sell-out.

Forgive me.
It was so much fun, and
I needed the money.